After getting back comments about my story, I made a lot of changes in order to make it sound more like Eurycleia as well as making it include more detail. To do this, I added more sentences that were her personal thoughts during the events occurring, and I described the events in more detail. Additionally, I tried to improve my epic simile by elaborating more and including more descriptive words.
After reading the story outloud, I fixed some sentences that sounded off and noticed that some of my verbs were in the wrong tense. I also changed the wording of some sentences to make it sound less formal, and instead, something that Eurycleia would say.
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