Odyssey storytelling corrections

After I practiced telling my story aloud, I found that there were sentences I needed to make sound clearer and smaller fixes to make sense of the context I was speaking in. I found that when I spoke the story aloud, it was almost like proofreading it over again, but I could actually hear the sentences to see if they made sense grammatically and in the context of my story. So I went back and changed a couple of those sentences.

As for the delivery of my story I found myself sounding more monotoned and not very expressive, for my presentation I need to make sure I use hand gestures and use different tones for different parts/emotion in the story.