Odyssey Revisions- Jacqueline Dugan

In my story, I changed many things after seeing the comments posted by my partner and after I read it out loud about 5 times.  I changed some vocabulary to make it more sophisticated.  For example, I changed "I went far into the palace" into "I traveled deep into the depths of the palace".  I also added more description and adjectives.  Instead of just saying "i looked away from the suitors eyes", I added "I looked away from the suitors cold, sharp eyes".  I also added more thoughts Penelope was having during certain times, like her feelings and emotions.  I added an epithet and an epic simile.  I also tried to read it more clearly and in a way Penelope would tell the story.