Wednesday, October 14, 2015

Book 22, Telemachus Rough Draft changes

For changes to my first draft, I didn't make any huge changes from my first draft, just some corrections in spelling, I added more epithets, hopefully improved my epic simile, and added more descriptive details about how he felt, what he saw, and what he thought.

For changes in content I added more descriptive words to make it sound alittle better and I fixed a few run on sentences so that they were alittle more smooth sounding.

For changes in delivery I made myself alittle louder so that it was easier hear, I stood up straighter to make myself slouch less, and I made myself look at my notes less when reading so that I could start memorizing all of the details of the story better.

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