The Color of Water is a good memoir book that is written with maternal love.
James lives with his eleven brothers and sisters in Brooklyn, and their mother, Ruth, is the only white female in their area. Thus, James begins to aware that his mother is somewhat different, and because of his black skin, he wonders whether his mother is his real mother. But each time he asks this question, his mother will reply with the internal answer that she is his real mother.
Ruth is a very eccentric mother. She never lets her son to play or communicate with either neighbors or friends. Instead, she creates a own world in her home. Each children has their own role in this big family, and they are able to play games according to their role. Ruth also sets many family rules to her children such as they have to come back home before the sunlights went out.
Ruth is also a very remarkable mother. She never cares about money very much, and even once her purse was stolen by thieves, she just takes it very easy and goes back to her house like nothing happens. Because of her white skin, many black people around her area always mock and satire her, but she will only fight back when it is related with her children. The most important thing is she insist on to take all her twelve children to school even though it costs more than she can support.
Clear and specific thesis, however you may want to relate it back to William Zinsser's criteria and how The Color of Water fulfills this. Provide more evidence as to how his mother's race made it difficult for her to overcome the obstacles she faced when raising them, how her eccentric methods were done out of love, and add more evidence to support the topic sentences in general with quotes from the text. It is not exactly clear what your topic sentences are and how you are organizing the ways James' mother's maternal love makes it a good memoir.
ReplyDeleteThomas makes some good points about your argument. You show what is remarkable about Ruth as a mother, but you need to use Zinsser's criteria more carefully as you construct an argument for why this is a good memoir. Your thesis isn't clear enough, and you don't have clear TS to structure your points. You give a lot of plot summary instead of connecting the evidence to an argument.
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